Well, your multisyllable rhyming and no offense, thats about it. You just didn’t really have anything that stuck out to me. Some of your flow sounded like parts of me in a freestyle. You know, with the random stretched words in there. Not trying to be a downer. You just gotta get out of that novice flow and create something that can be a signature to your flow. Last, I know its fun to talk about your rapping when you practice. But I wouldn’t recommend that as content for anything your gonna publish.
PS: Dont give up!! Look how long it took Hopsin to get to his level (I think he always says 10 years). With that being said, I’d recommend a job or school on the side