Last time I posted a verse on here I got some helpful tips. And I used some of them tips and am curious on what else the trtn people could give to me to help my writing improve. So although this doesn't have anything thats real deep or meaningful, does anyone think its lyrical and why?
Somethin ta come with uh head huntin flow, nothin but droppin the best I can go
Tuggin and sluggin and lovin and chuggin and snuggin and clutchin the pumped in no pluggin ears
Buggin confrontin me dumpin these bumpin schemes slumpin me comin weak just shit dream nothin near
Drunk with the bussin the led spittin flow, nuff of the gun poppin now rest be more slow
I arrived to the beat, so I could distinguish waves
Of bars then make the instrumental disintigrate
My main objective to murder the beat makin stabs at it
My tongue a mighty javalin attackin to pass the skin
Honestly still wanna make tweaks, godly astonishing feat.
Wanna make a verse so cold I'll be unthawing for weeks
Talk about pushing the peak, cautious when plotting on beats
Gotta make a verse so dope the beats drugs like weed
Constant practice the best advice when you look on the internet
Not much to go off so I write and I hope I figure best
Method to use but I greatly improved sense I first got interest and
Gettin a boost from my redundent use and leaving rappers inspected
Something good or bad to say or nothing at all, let me have it.