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Thread: A little piece, gimme some feedback..

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    Senior Member Mr.Pound's Avatar
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    A little piece, gimme some feedback..

    Its about me becoming a father and being all tore up inside emotionally.
    Just gimme some feedback, cuz any time I post shit I write on here nobody says a damn thing, but any time some wack ass shit is posted the damn forum blows up.


    its insane to think of the range of emotions
    that flow within me
    its like a dozen oceans clashing with a hell
    that burns infinitely
    how can i cope with the scope and magnitude
    of the situation i seem to be facin'
    one side of me screams "ITS GOOD!"
    the other side wants to start
    drinkin' and chasin

    I really need to conquer these demons within me
    squander these feelings that hit me
    how am i supposed to raise a child
    when Satans fires burn within me?
    my father left me when i was five
    did i retain that biological side?
    do i have the mind to ditch my wife
    and my child
    just like daddy tried?
    oh wait he succeeded..
    no longer conceded

    i need a slap in the back o' the head
    cuz right now my soul feels empty and dead
    I need to get my fat ass outta this bed
    I got a beautiful woman i gotta go wed
    I need to eliminate all o' these thoughts
    cuz soon Ill have a child thatll need to be fed

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    Senior Member l<ingJuelz's Avatar
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    its nice ta take ur emotions out wit a pen rite?...

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    Senior Member Mr.Pound's Avatar
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    Hell yeah it is...

    Quote Originally Posted by l<ingJuelz
    its nice ta take ur emotions out wit a pen rite?...

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