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    Senior Member Bizzaro's Avatar
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    Can i get some opinions on something i wrote.

    I used the instrumental from a song techs featured on called dark places. I dont think i really stayed wit the beat much but the overrall mood of the song helped me write it out. so tell me wat yal think

    Exodus this dark place
    dont let the demons catch up
    I gotta leave soon
    or its all gonna explode
    Can you hear me screaming
    All the pain I am feeling
    Let the smoke fill my lungs
    Dead body just leave it.

    Dark Places is where Im Coming from
    Dead pedophiles are all up and strung
    nobody gnna stop me
    cause I dont give a fucK
    Dark Places is where Im coming from.
    I can hear the angels whispering
    As I walk on by
    But all of you that worship this
    slowly all get left behind

    Insanity at its finest
    No one is fucking with
    I am the one that you all fear
    When your walking alone in the streets.

    Dark Places is where Im Coming from
    Dead pedophiles are all up and strung
    nobody gnna stop me
    cause I dont give a fucK
    Dark Places is where Im coming from.

    Walking in and out of my head
    I can see the light at the end
    But I dont wanna leave
    At home with these dead bodies all around me
    one pedophile, two pedophile
    All of them deserved the torture they were put threw.

    Fires burning down the cross in my room
    Lust is tearing at the picture of her hangin in the closet
    Love is telling me to leave her alone
    But the demon in me is telling me to bring her home....


    Dark Places is where Im Coming from
    Dead pedophiles are all up and strung
    nobody gnna stop me
    cause I dont give a fucK
    Dark Places is where Im coming from.

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    Senior Member shawn99's Avatar
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    Thats Great Brah!
    You Should Make Tha Wordz Rhyme A Lil Bit More But Thatz Badass!

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