alot of people said to give it another shot and start from scratch lemme no what you think about this one obviously its way to short i understand that but i didnt want to put alot of work into it if it was another retry. I will post up all 3 versions of my rough drafts and please tell me which one is worth working off of http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KoQP49jgj6g - this one i posted about and i was told to redo


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v0VbP47YSX8 - let me no about this one


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jrfypWLZF-8 - let me no about this one as well



Thanks guys i really appreciate the criticism