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    this the first verse to apiece i wrote, post opinion and criticism if you would hope jall enjoy.

    youd love to see the demon behind these eyes come to life but its not gonna see me through this. its been in dismay since the day that i died.
    waving goodbye, cant rely on a smile to get me by. im wondering why i
    have to fight it tooth and nail to no avail, just to hide from my own
    lies. now ive cut the ties that bound us together and all the tears have
    dried up, theyve moved on with the weather.when you said that forever
    was only three words away it didnt occur me that even though i was right
    there with you inside i was so far away and there was nothing i could
    say or do to fool you into believin it was gonna be okay. so whos gonna
    judge me if i run away. walk the streets and pray for answers. find my
    life dead in a ditch and walk away without a second thought. i developed
    a plot to massacre the whole world like a rifle taking shots at the
    bible. call me apathetic and spiteful. a heretic and a rival. pile the
    hatred up like bodies and rain blood on my revival. i love you all but
    im stuck running around in circles screamin grant me salvation and bliss
    eternal or curse me down to the infernal. just end this. im bleedin and
    not seekin faith or piece of mind to mend this, im hopin its not
    endless but if it is then sever that memory and cut the bitch out of me
    like an apendix. im no stranger to surgery, call these lyrics purgery
    and kill me cuz every other kid thats ever dreamed of bein a serial
    killa can feel me. dead friend rise from the grave if you can hear me
    spittin this morbid shit clearly. ill proclaim fame through death and
    never rest and fill this void with a voice that will make god and the
    devil fear me



    Im not in this to live life, im in this to spit rhymes. sure the air out there can get cold sumtimes but no where out there is ever gonna be home. home is here with my bones inside. the places i lay that i try to replace, the things that they say that i try like hell erase remind me a of a time when i was relishin a way of life that was beyond my right. but now ive turned the tide and im a long way from being able to say that im anywhere near my right mind. whether its railin lines to stay high and float away from digrace and decay or layin waste to grace with hatred and floating away into deep space just too save face, but i digress, im dead so im blessed and i dont have to smoke meth to think that god and everybody is out to put a bullet in my chest, bitch. think im negative? check my piss test. ill rip this demon squirmin from my chest and leave it in a trash bag hanging from a street light and invite the maggots to infest.now everybody hates on the D- E-ceased cuz he is nothin but maggot meat, what a fuckin freak.arise like a king of necropolis and engulf this world like a cancer while this entire reals populice is beggin on they knees for me to stop this.



    Now id love the thought of a happy home to bring sum peace to my bones but as ive grown what ive come to know is that the only way i can go on without hurtin the ones i love is for me to be alone, whether its self inflicted pain or standin at home alone in the cold and the rain or gettin gacked and splattin people on my windshield cuz i was doin 80 in the left lane. i can rest knowin that i didnt hurt a soul that mattered to me, i dont feel no guilt for this catstrophe. cuz as long as my loved ones were far away when i put the obituart on the front page i can sit bak and laugh and call that tragedy a masterpiece. after each funeral the despair grown like a tumor and will eventually kill me so that i can pay myself a visit and talk when im takin a walk in the park and then walk away and leave me to decay without a second thought



    WOOPWOOP sincerely, MIZTERDEAD the DESEASE


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    are you by any chance related to b-rent?

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    nah i aint, why?



    Quote Originally Posted by Dukecityspecialist
    are you by any chance related to b-rent?

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    Senior Member B-rent's Avatar
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    i dont get it



    Quote Originally Posted by Dukecityspecialist
    are you by any chance related to b-rent?

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    make a video of you rapping to it

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    i would, got no camera tho, lookint o start recording tho, might be able to tho soon



    Quote Originally Posted by brandon jesus grill
    make a video of you rapping to it

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    what dont you get?



    Quote Originally Posted by B-rent
    i dont get it


    Quote Originally Posted by Dukecityspecialist
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    Senior Member Toarrance's Avatar
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    I dont see why ppl dont get this... NOBODY likes to read music. record it if you want to present it...

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    if ya dont like it then u aint gotta read it homie..



    Quote Originally Posted by Toarrance
    I dont see why ppl dont get this... NOBODY likes to read music. record it if you want to present it...

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    Senior Member Toarrance's Avatar
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    Haha true true. Stay up mang. Ill listen if you record it.

    Quote Originally Posted by Brian Quinn Stuart
    if ya dont like it then u aint gotta read it homie..

    Quote Originally Posted by Toarrance
    I dont see why ppl dont get this... NOBODY likes to read music. record it if you want to present it...

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